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Vern Serratos: While our society is trying to help the environment and abate the damage we have caused by embracing the use of biofuels, we will only cause more destruction because deforestation emits more greenhouse gases than fossil fuels. In fact, deforestation, not the burning of fossil fuels, is the main cause of global warming (Howden). CBS News has reported that the elevated demand for biofuels has led to the clearing of tropical forests in several countries, which releases a perilous amount of carbon into our atmosphere. As a result, the use of biofuels will cause more damage to our environment, rather than help to reverse the damage we have inflicted. In addition to destroying the atmosphere, deforestation also destroys many habitats. By demolishing habitats around the world, we will ultimately drive many species to extinction. Therefore, the use of biofuels will endanger both our atmosphere and fellow species....Show more

Morris Olexy: In addition to being! responsible for deforestation and food shortages, biofuels will also be responsible for the expeditious increase of food prices. As biofuels become more attractive as an alternative fuel to government officials and the general public, who are unaware of the consequences they will bring, food prices will rapidly proliferate as our food supply is used up to make these fuels. Farmers will digress from growing crops for food in order to grow crops for biofuels because they will be getting paid more per acre. As farmers are rewarded to sever our food supply, consumers will suffer due to the shortened supply. Worldwide, people will not be able to afford to provide for themselves and their family, which will ultimately cause many people to become distraught and deranged....Show more

Jefferson Sarson: Another concern researchers and scientists have is that the expanded use of biofuels will threaten our food security, which will exacerbate hunger worldwide. The large scale us! e of biofuels will ultimately drive farmers to produce more cr! ops for fuel, rather than for food. Our society cannot permit people to starve in order to fuel our vehicles. As of the year 2003, there was an estimated 824 million people in the developing world afflicted with chronic hunger (Gidley). This number is anticipated to rise if biofuels continue to be promoted as a commendable alternative fuel. Biofuels not only harm our environment and the habitats of numerous species, but will also harm the human population through the diversion of food supplies....Show more

Rubi Romo: **ALSO..DO YOU THINK I SHOULD ADD A PARAGRAPH ABOUT HOW BIOFUELS ARE NOT EFFICIENT??

Shad Bushweller: However, they fail to inform the public of the many warnings researchers and scientists are announcing, which state that biofuels may have numerous inadvertent consequences. Professor Sir Peter Crane, director of the Royal Botanic Gardens, states, “The world should wake up to the dangers of the mass production of biofuels, which are increasingly ! seen as a major solution to global warming” (McCarthy). Therefore, it is imperative that the government not empower the use of biofuels because of the undeniable dangers, such as, deforestation at a global level, shortages of food, and the rapid inflation of food prices. One of the main concerns researchers have about the government mandating the use of biofuels is that it will cause an acceleration of deforestation throughout the world. As the demand increases, the rate of deforestation will rapidly grow to clear land for sugar cane and corn fields....Show more

Curt Broadhead: Today our society is concerned about the current condition of our environment as a result of our exorbitant dependence on fossil fuels. The majority of citizens are demanding that our government promote the use of alternative fuels, SUCH AS biofuels, to assist in solving current environmental problems, specifically global warming. Many politicians and government officials, including Pre! sident George W. Bush, have promised to support the adoption of biofuel! s. They affirm to citizens that biofuels have countless benefits, SUCH AS, being an environment-friendly source of energy and providing a new source of revenue for farmers. (INSTEAD OF STATING THESE THE SAME WAY AND USING "SUCH AS" TWICE CHOOSE ANOTHER PHRASE MAYBE for example, OR for instance.){However, they fail to inform the public of the many warnings researchers and scientists are announcing, which state that biofuels may have numerous inadvertent consequences.} [DONT START A SENTENCE WITH HOWEVER ] Professor Sir Peter Crane, director of the Royal Botanic Gardens, states, “The world should wake up to the dangers of the mass production of biofuels, which are increasingly seen as a major solution to global warming” (McCarthy). THEREFORE, it is imperative that the government not empower the use of biofuels because of the undeniable dangers, SUCH AS, deforestation at a global level, shortages of food, and the rapid inflation of food prices. (THEREFORE IS NOT REALLY NE! EDED HERE. JUST START THE SENTENCE WITH IT. SUCH AS SEEMS UNNECESSARY ALSO.)One of the main concerns researchers have about the government mandating the use of biofuels is that it will cause an acceleration of deforestation throughout the world. As the demand increases, the rate of deforestation will rapidly grow to clear land for sugar cane and corn fields.While our society is trying to help the environment and abate the damage we have caused by embracing the use of biofuels, we will only cause more destruction because deforestation emits more greenhouse gases than fossil fuels. In fact, deforestation, not the burning of fossil fuels, is the main cause of global warming (Howden). CBS News has reported that the elevated demand for biofuels has led to the clearing of tropical forests in several countries, which releases a perilous amount of carbon into our atmosphere. As a result, { AS A RESULT OF WHAT?} the use of biofuels will cause more damage to our environment, rather ! than help to reverse the damage we have inflicted. In addition to destr! oying the atmosphere, deforestation also destroys many habitats. By demolishing habitats around the world, we will ultimately drive many species to extinction. THEREFORE, the use of biofuels will endanger both our atmosphere and fellow species.(THEREFORE IS NOT NEEDED. YOU ARE NOT CONNECTING THE ABOVE THOUGHT. NEVER START A SENTECE WITH THEREFORE. i MIGHT WOULD SAY. The use of biofuels will demolish our atmosphere and habitats around the world and will ultimately drive many species to extinction. SEE HOW I COMBINED THE TWO SENTENCES.)Another concern researchers and scientists have is that the expanded use of biofuels will threaten our food security, which will exacerbate hunger worldwide. The large scale use of biofuels will ultimately drive farmers to produce more crops for fuel, rather than for food. Our society cannot permit people to starve in order to fuel our vehicles. As of the year 2003, there was an estimated 824 million people in the developing world afflicted ! with chronic hunger (Gidley). This number is anticipated to rise if biofuels continue to be promoted as a commendable alternative fuel. Biofuels not only harm our environment and the habitats of numerous species, but will also harm the human population through the diversion of food supplies.In addition to being responsible for deforestation and food shortages, biofuels will also be responsible for the expeditious increase of food prices. {As biofuels become more attractive as an alternative fuel to government officials and the general public, who are unaware of the consequences they will bring, food prices will rapidly proliferate as our food supply is used up to make these fuels. } ODD WORDING IN THAT SENTENCE NOT SURE WHY? Farmers will digress from growing crops for food in order to grow crops for biofuels because they will be getting paid more per acre. As farmers are rewarded to sever our food supply, consumers will suffer due to the shortened supply. Worldwide, peop! le will not be able to afford to provide for themselves and their famil! y, WHICH will ultimately cause many people to become distraught and deranged.(I WOULD REARRANGE THE SENTENCE. Worldwide, people will not be able to afford to provide for themselves and their family ultimately causing many people to become distraught and deranged. WHICH is not needed)I HOPE THIS HELPS!...Show more